Again, my favorite thing about your poetry is the incorporation of modern objects and qualms. It adds a timeliness to your work that makes it even more poignant and significant. (I guess a record isn't even that modern anymore but the physical containment of completed music within an object is still relatively modern.) There's a lot of weight in the images created here. I read this three times all the way through.
"The part of the whole/that’s the wound," "the needle in the loom." Beautiful!
This reflection on lust is made more poignant with the image of the record for me because I have a bossa nova album of Sinatra/Gilberto and the only song that skips is “The Girl from Ipanema”.
There’s a merciless honesty in this, a willingness to inhabit the part of yourself that doesn’t forgive, that watches and waits with desire tangled in shame. I love how the body and the record become one: repetition, friction, and the inevitability of return. The imagery: needle, loom, water- threads the interior with the material, making the self both witness and accused. It’s precise, unflinching, and devastating in its intimacy: the part that grips, that waits, that knows, and still does.
I didn't know about this Magritte until I started looking for images to match the poem, and was it perfect. In fact I changed the title to match the Magritte.
Excellent work
Thanks, Bence
Again, my favorite thing about your poetry is the incorporation of modern objects and qualms. It adds a timeliness to your work that makes it even more poignant and significant. (I guess a record isn't even that modern anymore but the physical containment of completed music within an object is still relatively modern.) There's a lot of weight in the images created here. I read this three times all the way through.
"The part of the whole/that’s the wound," "the needle in the loom." Beautiful!
This is fantastic work. Really flows nicely and has a depth that only poetry can bring. I feel that picture sets the tone for this piece as well.
Thanks, dude! Really appreciate you liked this one :-)
This reflection on lust is made more poignant with the image of the record for me because I have a bossa nova album of Sinatra/Gilberto and the only song that skips is “The Girl from Ipanema”.
You have given that skip new meaning. Thank you!
This one stirs something deep.
You’re one of my people The In Between. I even have a poem that shares your name https://consciousresistence.substack.com/p/the-in-between
What a lovely little synchronicity.
I noticed your name popping up in my feed not too soon after I had published the poem. Thought it was cool.
There’s a merciless honesty in this, a willingness to inhabit the part of yourself that doesn’t forgive, that watches and waits with desire tangled in shame. I love how the body and the record become one: repetition, friction, and the inevitability of return. The imagery: needle, loom, water- threads the interior with the material, making the self both witness and accused. It’s precise, unflinching, and devastating in its intimacy: the part that grips, that waits, that knows, and still does.
As alwyas, Dipti, you've broken down this poem brilliantly.
I agree the audio-record metaphor carried it like an engine
Why did you use ‘her hips’ but the rest you said ‘your’? It jarred me a bit unless he cheated hmmm that could be it
You're onto something broker
oh yeah!! I went through it line by line quite a few times and meditated on each one. You painted a very clear picture if ones willing to sit with it
Lovely audiophilic stuff and I like that Magritte too.
I didn't know about this Magritte until I started looking for images to match the poem, and was it perfect. In fact I changed the title to match the Magritte.