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Dipti  Vyas's avatar

This poem is a descent through cosmic disillusionment that gradually tightens into something intimate and painfully human. You dismantle the symbols cultures rely on—sky, moon, kings, prophets, archetypes, gods, revealing them as fragile and fallible, until every cosmic and mythic certainty collapses into gray emptiness. Yet in that ruin, the final turn to love becomes the poem’s anchor, the one truth that does not break. The contrast between the apocalyptic unraveling and that quiet, unwavering human core gives the piece its emotional weight.

Adrian's avatar

Thank you once again for your breakdown and like Dipti. I appreciate you!

Ricardo Guzman Jr's avatar

Banger of an ending on this one, man.

Adrian's avatar

Thank you so much, bro! Always means a lot 🙏

Ezra Godson's avatar

Masterful poem

Adrian's avatar

Thank you, Ezra! 🙏

Saif's avatar

“ Every prayer, every poem, every story

and each hope a check that bounced.”

Lol that part made me laugh. Well written. Thanks for sharing.

Adrian's avatar

😁 Thanks for reading, bro!

Erichka's avatar

LOVED the image you painted of Theseus in the labyrinth!! Sooo good!

Ryan Mills's avatar

What a trip to the brink and then that beautiful turn at the end. All the passion of true insight. I felt it all the way from genuine exasperation to the fullness of love’s truth.

Adrian's avatar

Appreciate you, Ryan! Hope everything is moving along in a positive direction, man. Really want to see you finish those Cantos.

Ryan Mills's avatar

Me too, brother. Thank you. I’ll be ready soon. It’s time to get back into the good fight

Ana Cristina Caelen's avatar

Heartbreakingly beautiful.

Adrian's avatar

🥹 Thank you !

Kurt Stein's avatar

Theseus stumbling desperate is badass. i might have to start smoking bowls again (i read your secrets).

Adrian's avatar

Actually, Theseus stumbling desperately was me trying the write the last few days after my weed ran out haha

BTW I read your poem today; it slaps hard. I put a pin on it because I didn't finish reading the commentary, but later today I'll find time to finish it and comment+share.

Kurt Stein's avatar

lol oh well maybe i’ll stay off the 🍃 after all

Kurt Stein's avatar

tyvm kind sir